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Thursday, 15 November 2018

What's Behind The Door

Hello fellow viewers WALT do a 100 word challenge and in it we have to make a story with 100 words and if you want to you can count all of the words if you want just don't count this. 

 What's Behind The Door  

 What's behind the door the sound of something or someone trying to get out from whatever is behind the door. I wasn’t going to take any chances that door is not going to open it could be a mummy that rose from the dead and was going to kill. This pyramid door was to be boarded up and not to be opened. you could even blow it up like who cares it is just a stupid triangle in the middle of nowhere Egypt is a weird place it sucks, anyway artillery strike to kill the dumb triangle. Terr  boom boom!    

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  1. Anonymous19 November 2018 at 11:09

    Hi im charlie from kaingaroa school. This is a realy cool challenge that you did. Just edit it because you missed some punctuation. :)

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    1. Anonymous22 November 2018 at 11:19

      hi charlie my names charlie and im future charlie

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    2. Anonymous5 December 2018 at 08:40

      Haha

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  2. Anonymous19 November 2018 at 11:12

    Hi Declan,
    I'm Lara i really like your post i think that it is quite good i did not count your words my advice would be for you to add a reflection .

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  3. Anonymous21 November 2018 at 11:29

    hi delcian im brazil from kaingaroa your punchauation is grebat
    but use more detail

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  4. Anonymous4 December 2018 at 10:25

    Hi Declan, I'm Ella from Kaingaroa school and I'm a year 6. I like your post because it has nice words. I think you did a great job. My advice would be for you to add a reflection like Lara suggested and maybe not repeat 'door' all the time in your story. And maybe working on your puncuation because I found some mistakes with your puncuation. Other than that it is AMAZING! Thanks.

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  5. Anonymous5 December 2018 at 08:41

    HI Declan I like your post maybe you can ad a reflection like Lara and Ella said.

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  6. Anonymous5 December 2018 at 08:48

    Hi Declan I'm Jaspa I like your story but you just need a little more detail

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